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  1. Taylor Hallman
    Taylor Hallman at |

    I really liked this story. It’s clean, no extra verbiage. You present the tension without direct exposition. Nice job. One small note; supine not prone.

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    1. Nicci Haydon
      Nicci Haydon at |

      Thank you so much for reading, for the kind comment and for the note – I’ve not heard the word “supine” before, but will know it from now on!

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  2. Taylor Hallman
    Taylor Hallman at |

    Nicci, I’m pleased that you took my note in the way that it was intended. When I clicked send I had a moment of ‘Oops, maybe I shouldn’t have sent that.’

    Prone is on your stomach and supine is on your back.

    Anyhow, check my erotic blog at https://hallmant.wordpress.com/

    Note: it needs a little editing and I just haven’t gotten around to it.

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    1. Nicci Haydon
      Nicci Haydon at |

      Not at all – I appreciate the advice. I’m a bit of a novice at writing anything that other people might read, so I looked up the words as soon as I saw your comment, and obviously you’re totally right.

      I already checked out your blog too!

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  3. Satya
    Satya at |

    A nice piece indeed, Nicci! Keep it up! Expect some more in future from your ‘sexy’ pen. Congrats!

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